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1 Directions: Write an essay commenting on the remark “I’m a great believer in luck, and I find the harder I work，the more I have of it.” You can give examples to illustrate your point and then explain how you will put it into practice in your future career. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

参考答案：Some people say “I’m a great believer in luck, and I find the harder I work, the more I have of it.” This remark means that the harder you work, the more opportunities you will have. Indeed, both diligence and opportunities are key factors to success.
If you intend to fulfill one of your ambitions, you must make intense efforts and get prepared for any breakthrough. Otherwise, you will not be able to take advantage of opportunities once they arise. The difference between a person who succeeds and one who fails often lies in the way he treats opportunities. The successful person always makes enough preparations to jump at the right opportunity. The unsuccessful person, on the other hand, often works little and invariably lets opportunities slip away.
In my opinion, there are plenty of opportunities for everyone, but only those who are adequately prepared can make use of them to achieve their purposes. Accordingly, I will work hard in my future career so as to be ready for more opportunities.
系统解析：
范文点评：
1.以引言开篇，解释引言的含义，然后提出论点。
2.采用对比论证的方法，说明勤奋与否带来的不同结果。
3.再次点题，并且提出以后会努力工作，为更多机会做好准备。
句法点评：
1. I’m a great believer in luck, and I find the harder I work, the more I have of it.
本句中“the harder...the more...”是表示“越......越…...”的比较结构。
2. In my opinion, there are plenty of opportunities for everyone, but only those who are adequately prepared can make use of them to achieve their purposes.
but连接两个转折关系的并列句，who引出定语从句，修饰限定先行词those。those为不定代词。

2 Directions: Write an essay commenting on the remark “Strive for excellence, not perfection”. You can give examples to illustrate your point and then explain how you will balance the relationship between excellence and perfection. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

参考答案：As to the relationship between excellence and perfection, there is a saying which goes like this: “Strive for excellence, not perfection.” This serves as a precise description of difference between them.
Excellence almost always falls short of perfection. While excellence is a motivator that brings out the best in you, perfection is only a matter of perception. What’s more, excellence is a continuous process and not an accident. However, perfection is a fleeting and elusive moment even when you think you have achieved it. For an athlete at the Olympics Games, if he strives for “excellence” and wins a Silver medal by breaking his own record, he will be thrilled and proud of his accomplishment. On the contrary, for a perfectionist he will feel terrible and discouraged about winning a Silver medal simply because he fails to get a Gold medal even if he also breaks his own record.
In summary, perfection is a myth, but excellence is a habit. We should pursue excellence, but we’d better avoid being a slave to perfection.
系统解析：
范文点评：
1.引入引言并加以评述。
2.主体段落采用对比论证的方式阐述卓越与完美的关系。
3.以奥运选手为例，以有可能出现的两种情况对比，论证论点。
4.结尾段再次点题。
句法点评：
1. While excellence is a motivator that brings out the best in you. Perfection is only a matter of perception.
while连接并列关系的两个单句，前后表示对比、对照，while意为“而”， bring out the best in sb.意为“展现某人的最佳状态”。
2. Although practice makes perfect, we should avoid being a slave to perfection.
although引导让步状语从句，意为“尽管”，Practice makes perfect. 是个谚语，意为“熟能生巧”。

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