范文点评：
1.开篇紧扣题目和提纲要求，提出知识重要论者的观点。
2.进一步说明知识重要论者的理由。
3.使用承上启下之过渡词，引出第二个观点：经验比知识重要。
4.分析经验重要的原因。
5.提出自己的观点。
6.建议具体做法，阐述观点。
句法点评：
1. I think both the first and second views above are partially correct in that both knowledge and experience are essential if you want to be successful.
in that是引出原因的一种表达方式，意为“因为”，这种句式主要是为了说明一个比较长的原因，比because更显得全句前后对称。
2. For us youngsters, I suggest that we should study as hard as possible at school so that we may accumulate as much knowledge as possible.
过渡衔接句子，使全文更加流畅自然。so that引导目的状语从句。
3. I believe that only by doing so will we achieve more successes in our life.
only+介词短语放在宾语从句的句首，句子要采用半倒装结构，即谓语部分的系动词、情态动词或助动词要放在主语前面。倒装句的采用使得文章句式显得更加灵活多样。

范文点评：
1.围绕题目和提纲展开，引出第一个观点：兼职重要。
2.阐述兼职重要的原因。
3.自然过渡，指出第二个观点：专注学习重要。
4.阐述专注学习重要的原因。
5.提出自己的观点并具体阐述。
句法点评：
1. Some university students hold that they may get real-life experiences by doing part-time jobs such as being tutor, salesperson or waiter.
Some...hold that…是转述他人观点的一个常用句式，that引导宾语从句。such as...为固定短语，意为“诸如……之类”。
2. Campus time, as they see it, is very short and they should focus the limited time on the study of their majors and the expansion of their knowledge so as to be better prepared for their future jobs.
as they see it是插入语，意为“在他们看来”。so that引出目的状语从句。