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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Learn to Control Your Temper. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words following the outline given below.
Why is it necessary to control your temper?
How will you control your temper?
  • 参考答案:Learn to Control Your Temper
    Everyone loves those who are sunny, cooperative and good-tempered. Whenever you become bad-tempered, those around you will be offended. This is why it is necessary to control your temper although sometimes you may feel very angry or even mad with others. Some scientists have found that those who are good-tempered tend to be more successful in their career and family than those who easily lose their temper. Naturally, those good-tempered people are physically healthier.
    To control your temper, you need to bear these points in your mind. First, bad temper will hurt not only yourself but others as well. Second, if you are really very angry at somebody or something, you should try to avoid them. Third, if you cannot avoid them, you’d better try to think of something or somebody else that can make you happy.
    As adults, we should be able to control our temper so as to be on good terms with people around us.
  • 系统解析:
    范文点评:
    1.首句以好脾气的人受欢迎来做铺垫,反衬脾气不好的坏处。
    2.采用反例法说明控制不好脾气的危害。
    3.衔接自然、流畅,引出提纲要求的第一个论点:控制脾气的必要性。
    4.从两个层面论述好脾气的好处。
    5.第二段首句引出提纲的第二点:如何控制脾气。
    6.从三个方面论述如何控制脾气。通过使用First,Second, Third等序数词使论述层次清晰,逻辑严密。
    7.结尾段落再次强调控制脾气的重要性。
    句法点评:
    1. Everyone loves those who are sunny, cooperative and good-tempered.
    who引导定语从句,从句的表语是由三个形容词并列而成。
    2. Third, if you cannot avoid them, you’d better try to think of something or somebody else that can make you happy.
    you’d better后面接动词原形。that引导定语从句,因被修饰的是不定代词sb.和sth.,所以必须由that来引导。
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